Dear diary,
The bullying is still going on, I feel weaker like I'm rotting on the inside. I'm to shy to talk to anyone it's like darkness is following me everywhere. I'm crying rivers of tears in my room, it's painful more painful than anything else. I feel like a moulding apple on top of a rubbish tip in the freezing winter. HELP!
WOW,Pav that was amazing,but are you sure that's a 100 words ;)
ReplyDeleteHi Dylan, I counted the words and there are 63 words in total and thanks.
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Hello Pav,
ReplyDeleteThis is a well written diary entry. I can feel the weakness felt by the writer. Well done for sharing an insight into the loneliness of the bullied. :)
In reality, a diary entry would only help if someone were to read it so I hope another person sees the bullying and tells. No one should suffer bullying.
@RossMannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Hello Pav,
ReplyDeleteThis is a well written diary entry. I can feel the weakness felt by the writer. Well done for sharing an insight into the loneliness of the bullied. :)
In reality, a diary entry would only help if someone were to read it so I hope another person sees the bullying and tells. No one should suffer bullying.
@RossMannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Hello Pav,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Isabelle, and I am in 6th grade. I go to The Phoenix School in Salem, Massachusettes. I really loved your 100 Word Challenge. I liked how you put it into a diary format, and I also liked how you described how you felt like a rotting apple on the tip on a freezing winter. Great job describing! Bullying is not ok, and it isn't good to do it. Keep up the good work. Here is the link to my 100 word challenge about bullying. If you have the time to check mine out, please leave a comment on the comment section below: http://kidblog.org/PhoenixKids6-8/fecf6782-6097-4ce7-a6a6-501eca70f864/help-prevent-bullying-100-word-challenge-10/
WOW Pav that is ACE. There's really 65 words.
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WOW amazing 100wc pav you have put a lot of good word in to your 100wc
ReplyDeleteWow Pav! Well done for the amazing language you have used - my favorite part was the part about feeling like you were rotting on the inside. I hope that the person stops being mean to you!
ReplyDeleteThat was really good! You have used great describing words like "I'm rotting inside" and "I'm crying rivers of tears in my room".
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work.
Hi Pav,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Noah and I liked your 100wc. What I liked about it was how you put it together. It went perfect together. I have one question for you. Why did you pick to put your 100wc in this format?
Your friend,
Noah