Hi Lillie, and well done for your 100wc this week! You've used lots of different sentence types and also some lovely language - well done!
A way to improve even more is to think about how you could make your writing stand out even more - perhaps sometimes go for something a bit out of the ordinary to grab your reader's attention. Mr K :-)
Thank you for your 100WC this week, i really enjoyed reading it! You have used lots of exciting words which have left me wondering what was in the parcel? I also like how you have hand-written your writing, you've very neat handwriting. For next time could you include a twist in your story that the audience will not expect, this will make your writing more exciting! Well done,
Hi Lillie, and well done for your 100wc this week! You've used lots of different sentence types and also some lovely language - well done!
ReplyDeleteA way to improve even more is to think about how you could make your writing stand out even more - perhaps sometimes go for something a bit out of the ordinary to grab your reader's attention.
Mr K :-)
Hello Lillie,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your 100WC this week, i really enjoyed reading it! You have used lots of exciting words which have left me wondering what was in the parcel? I also like how you have hand-written your writing, you've very neat handwriting.
For next time could you include a twist in your story that the audience will not expect, this will make your writing more exciting!
Well done,
Caitlin (Team 100WC)
i thik you need to have a different font but beside that it was really good and exiting
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