Dear Ben, Well done, your piece is great! You used some good adjectives. I like how you used three of the words in one sentence! Next time you could of used bitter openers thinking about Adverbs and Connectives. from Charlottew www.6d2012.highlawnprimary.net
This is a good pice of righting but I think some of it needs a bit more description I hope you use this to help you and if you tried a tiny bit more then you could be a proper wrighter !
Dear Ben,
ReplyDeleteWell done, your piece is great! You used some good adjectives. I like how you used three of the words in one sentence! Next time you could of used bitter openers thinking about Adverbs and Connectives.
from Charlottew www.6d2012.highlawnprimary.net
well done that was amasing .you used good use of adjectives.you are really good at using descripton
ReplyDeleteBen that was amassing there is nothing left to say but was the monkey sad that you dropped it?
ReplyDeleteThis is a good pice of righting but I think some of it needs a bit more description I hope you use this to help you and if you tried a tiny bit more then you could be a proper wrighter !
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