Wednesday, 5 June 2013

Cayla's 100wc - week 33:

Running, running as fast as I could they were chasing me: the beautiful crystle white birds glimmering in the sun the louder their whines the faster I ran! I tried to act calm (however I was emotionally torn bye this event). The birds swooped down and everything went hideously black. Black, I had always been scared of black I rummaged around to find out where I was: I was in the bird's stomach...

Furiously I hectically banged against each side of the stupid birds. I bound to get out will die trying to get free from this hell hole!

By Cayla.
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  1. Anonymous5 June 2013 at 12:46

    Hi Cayla - what a dramatic 100wc! I really like the way you've used the prompt AND also some brilliant special sentences!
    One thing to look at closely is just checking those full stops - can you spot where any missing ones might need to go?
    Mr K :-)

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  2. Mrs Halfordteam 100wc9 June 2013 at 08:43

    Hello Cayla, how scary to be inside a bird. You tried hard to vary your sentence starts and use some interesting vocabulary. Don't forget to read your writing through carefully to see if there are any changes to make.

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