Thursday, 20 June 2013

Jade's 100wc - week 35:

It was a dark , scary and frightening Halloween night , everyone was asleep, (not a single sound was heard.) Suddenly a light was so bright it could blind you. It was a spacecraft in the air shining on one house . The child woke and looked at the craft it was hard to see as the light was so bright , like flames, your eyes would feel like they're on fire. It started to make a sound as smoke was coming out of the front like water, the doors opened very slowly. There was something inside the craft. Was it an alien, from a different  dimension.

1 comment:

  1. Hello Jade. That was good because you used a rhetorical question at the end.You have also used many adjectives. Look at your punctuation as you have done a few mistakes.
    From your friends at High Lawn
    Reece

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