Dear Diary,
Today was petrifying, It was the end of the world as i knew it. The light was so bright it was blinding. I'm utterly scared. I'm crying in my sleep just thinking about it. It was so dark and mysterious I was not sure what it was. Until it got me!
I was rolling around in agony, the pain was treacherous. It’s saw like hands tore through my arm it was pouring out blood endlessly. I kept pressure on it but no use it wouldn't stop.
I was going to die of blood loss. I am still suffering now only a matter of time.
Hi Ceri
ReplyDeleteWhat a great idea to write as a diary entry, it makes your writing stand out. It also gives you the opportunity to write in the past and present tense which is difficult to do.
Keep writing!
Miss T team 100wc
Dear Ceri,
ReplyDeletethis is an outstanding piece of writing, I like how you have done it as a diary entry. I also like how you have used short sentences for effects. Maybe next time you could describe the background.
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