Yikes! I hope you got away, Ben! This is an entertaining 100wc which I enjoyed reading very much. One way to improve next time is to make sure that you check carefully that you've got all your punctuation in there, like full stops and speech marks. Mr K :-)
I love seeing writing about aliens because you can be so creative with it! I like the different sentence openers you have used and wondered whether you could think about using different punctuation, for example ellipses, to add tension?
Yikes! I hope you got away, Ben! This is an entertaining 100wc which I enjoyed reading very much. One way to improve next time is to make sure that you check carefully that you've got all your punctuation in there, like full stops and speech marks.
ReplyDeleteMr K :-)
Ok i will try to improve that next time and i did not get away he shot me.
ReplyDeleteA very good story ben!
ReplyDeleteyouve got great imagination.
dad. x
Dear Ben,
ReplyDeleteI love seeing writing about aliens because you can be so creative with it! I like the different sentence openers you have used and wondered whether you could think about using different punctuation, for example ellipses, to add tension?
Miss Tarrant
Team 100WC