Thursday 18 October 2012

Lillie's 100wc - week 6:

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3 comments:

  1. Hi Lillie, and well done for your 100wc this week! You've used lots of different sentence types and also some lovely language - well done!

    A way to improve even more is to think about how you could make your writing stand out even more - perhaps sometimes go for something a bit out of the ordinary to grab your reader's attention.
    Mr K :-)

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  2. Hello Lillie,

    Thank you for your 100WC this week, i really enjoyed reading it! You have used lots of exciting words which have left me wondering what was in the parcel? I also like how you have hand-written your writing, you've very neat handwriting.
    For next time could you include a twist in your story that the audience will not expect, this will make your writing more exciting!
    Well done,

    Caitlin (Team 100WC)

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    1. i thik you need to have a different font but beside that it was really good and exiting

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