Hi Gabby - gosh, I wonder how long it took to repair the school! This is a great 100wc - you've used lots of descriptive language and a good simile. Perhaps next time you could be even more ambitious and daring with the language and sentence types that you use! Mr K :-)
Hey Gabby :) You have used some lovely descriptive language in your story and I would love to see how you would describe the monster in more detail because it seems really scary already!
Hi Gabby - gosh, I wonder how long it took to repair the school! This is a great 100wc - you've used lots of descriptive language and a good simile.
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Mr K :-)
I really like the way you edit it and how your mom thought you were mad and the monster. You really need to make a second it wold be a sequel.
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ReplyDeleteThis 100WC has a good beginning, middle, and ending. Great descriptive language and kudos for the simile. Nice work. (Ocean City, NJ, USA)
Hey Gabby :)
ReplyDeleteYou have used some lovely descriptive language in your story and I would love to see how you would describe the monster in more detail because it seems really scary already!
Kate (Team 100WC)
I thik your story was really cool and exiting but i think your writing was to small.
ReplyDeletewell done Gabby i realy like i ran like a cheater.
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