Hi Sammy - well done for your 100wc this week! Your story has made me feel very christmassy, and it's still only October (probably a bit early to put the decorations up!). A way to make your work even better would be to make sure that you always check that punctuation - can you spot any missing full stops or speech marks? Mr K :-)
This is a wonderful story, Sam! I love the way you share the dream and what happened after the alarm went off. Please remember to use punctuation marks. This really helps your readers to understand the text, idea by idea, especially if you choose to publish a handwritten text. Keep up the great work, Sam! Kind regards, Diethild
Wow, you have got some great ideas, Sammy! I especially like how you used the theme of Christmas. Next time, you could make sure you read back over your work to check for missing punctuation marks. Brilliant work, Sammy! :)
i am now in year 7 and looking back on my work this really brings back memories and how my work has changed from now thanks for all the commet and thanks for being the best teacher ever MR K and I miss greenfields a lot and ash class as well from sammy ashton :):)=)
Hi Sammy - well done for your 100wc this week! Your story has made me feel very christmassy, and it's still only October (probably a bit early to put the decorations up!).
ReplyDeleteA way to make your work even better would be to make sure that you always check that punctuation - can you spot any missing full stops or speech marks?
Mr K :-)
This is a wonderful story, Sam! I love the way you share the dream and what happened after the alarm went off.
ReplyDeletePlease remember to use punctuation marks. This really helps your readers to understand the text, idea by idea, especially if you choose to publish a handwritten text.
Keep up the great work, Sam!
Kind regards,
Diethild
Wow, you have got some great ideas, Sammy! I especially like how you used the theme of Christmas. Next time, you could make sure you read back over your work to check for missing punctuation marks.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant work, Sammy! :)
Laura Team 100WC
i am now in year 7 and looking back on my work this really brings back memories and how my work has changed from now thanks for all the commet and thanks for being the best teacher ever MR K and I miss greenfields a lot and ash class as well from sammy ashton :):)=)
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